|Reviews for Power|
| dragonflydreamer 9/14/08 . chapter 1
I like the last line because the feeling of hopelessness leaves a strong, lasting impression on the reader.
I didn't like the second through fourth lines of the second stanza. I don't even know if this was intentional, but they were the only lines that rhymed in the poem, and the inconsistancy was distracting.
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| half-sketched.staccatos 9/13/08 . chapter 1
Wow, I wish you'd continue with this, go deeper and into more detail. When this ended, I craved more.
The only part that bothered me was the fact that you started most parts with "and." It seemed useless and I didn't like it so much. It would be more powerful, I think, without that.