really dark and evocative. especially like "the cobbled streets of hell". nice.

one thing confused me:
"That breaths it's last onto you"
Do you mean "breaths" to be a verb, breathes? And i'm guessing "it's" is supposed to be "its"... in which case, i'm still not sure i understand. but anyway, good work.

I love the imagery--I can perfectly picture this poem in my head. I like the concept of this poem. Great job!

I love this! I hear it like the words of a summoning incantation, with lightning striking in the background and an unnatural wind starting up as the speaker holds a knife against his/her own flesh. Wow... kinda creepy actually. Anywho, there's obviously more happening here - the term "inner demon" suggests a Mr. Hyde character, the hidden, twisted passions that have always lived inside the speaker. I suppose the many possible readings is what makes it so fantastic.

Cobbled streets of hell is an interesting image - the traditional fiery lake views leaves little room for cobbled streets. I like it.

Oops
Your right it should be it's not its'
I just fixed it

(anyway, thanks for the reveiw)

"That breaths its’ last onto you"... this confused me, what was it referring to? I thought it was the whims of eternity, but that would make it plural so I'm not sure.

I like the tone you create with the style of language you chose, it works well with the subject. I also like the repetition at the end.

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I like this piece - especially for the concept behind it, though the execution's not too shabby either. =) You approach the invocation of inner demons so /deliberately/, it's enthralling. Others invoke them by running away, but here you confront, you /beckon/. That's a very interesting concept, in my books. Kudos.