Aww...that is sssssooooo cringey! Update soon I love this story!

Wow. Nice :) I like how clear, concise, and descriptive your writing is at the same time. I definitely agree with Jay - I would be pissed in that situation! But I wonder what her little secret is... hmmm... Anyway, great work! I love the similarity yet obvious difference between the twins; boy-girl twins are my favorite! :)

intriguing O_O it's so exciting and i really like the characters.

I cant wait till its done but when are you gonna finish it!

I loved it cant wit for more please hurry and post a new chapter!

Hurry please I cant wait!

Like it. Jason's friends are wierd, then again I think all emo's are wierd. Who wants to wear black, listen to my chemical romance and cut yourself for fun. Its not a fashion statement, its just plain crazy. Now, having offended enough people I'll just say hope you update soon, I see its been a while x

Jason's sweet, but his friends are scary. I'm still trying to figure out if they're actually going to hurt Jay or not- this IS from the romance section, right? XD Anyway, nice work once again! I did find one little typo, though:

"He plaid with the balls, throwing four against each other just to hear the responding click!"

"Played", not "plaid".

When starting to read a new story, I always decide to check a few things beside summary. Like the nubers of chapters, numbers of words and the day of the last update. Well, I wasn't thorough enough now, this story hasn't been updated nearly in two months. My bad.

What I really wanted to say is that I liked it. I'm not too sure where it is going because considering the male characters so far I feel it rather angst than humor. But you know it better. :) And Jay is a bit strange. Not swearing but beating up guys? I'm curious what will happen. I will be intense, won't it?

Great story. Update soon.

That's why she needs to pay attention. Personally, I don't like the people Jason hangs out with, but maybe they won't do anything to Jay.

Love it!

whoa. whoa. this is really, really amazing.

I mean, it just pulled me in from the start. Jay's a little too perfect, eh?

Doesn't like people swearing? Haha. I don't swear much myself, but I don't care when others do.

Ahaha. Jason's a wuss. Sorry, he is. Stick up for your sister, man.

If he continues hanging out with those two, he might need a beating. We'll see next chapter though, won't we?

Anyway, pretty please update soon!

Hey! Cool story! Update soon!

Ack! I haven't forgotten about your story, I promise! I've been really busy lately...

Anyway, yay for an update! Or updates... This chapter was just as well-written as the first. I couldn't find any mistakes, either. I love Jay and Jason's brother-sister relationship. I think it's cute she's so concerned about him smoking, maybe because I've been having similar issues lately... And Eric seems so... psychopathic!

Oh, and I'm so flattered to have a spot on your profile page! What an honor! XD

I really like this so far.

Jason's friends scare me.

They really scare me. -whimper-

I laughed so hard at the end of chapter 3. xD

Question, are they like...in high school? Or university?

hmm...interesting piece from Jason's perspective. I've got to wonder why he thinks of them as friends, but that's siblings for you, I suppose. I like that the different perspectives are very clear and seperate. They think differently, and so you write differently for each of them. I liked this chapter and can't wait to read more.