I like the format here. The ellipses in the first and last line and the italics. Though it bothered me a bit that you used and to start off the last line in the first and second stanza, but not the third.

I do like the piece though, it's really relateable and very bittersweet.

great job i like it nice freestyle hon.

Mandi(loversdream17)

This is just absolutly amazing! Love it adding it to my C2. Great job!

XKristie MarieX