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| Just Theo 2008-10-24 ch 1,   | i think your very talented . |
| Peskypiskie 2008-09-15 ch 1, | This is pretty cool! I looked at it because it said suspense (which is a category for my story). So i clicked and i'm glad i did! Nice job. |
| LeChem 2008-09-15 ch 1, | This and your apocalypse story, both of which I just read, seem to have a theme. I like it, though. In this one I've got to say that I really like the ending. "She would still have to run, but only a little farther." It really captured the sense of having to work to get away from evil and closer to that higher power, whatever you may believe in. And your descriptions, though scant, really embody that darkness that we attach to evil. You might, however, want to explain more how the crash related to Satan and his darkness, because it just sort of seemed to have been thrown in there for no purpose. Maybe I just missed it, but you might want to make it a little clearer. |
| Alazar-Ramir 2008-09-15 ch 1, | Interesting idea. Now I ask, was it good vs evil or life vs death? It was a simply structured piece which was able to convey everything that had needed to be read by the reader to understand it. Keep up the good work. |