OH, my goodness this story is very good. I love the eerie feeling I got from reading it, especially when Gabby and her father met the brother and the sister. I also love the scene in the church, it makes you wonder what types of secrets the community are keeping; it also makes me wonder why the resident seem so robotic. You are a very talented writer, please, please, please and please update soon.

nice story :)

it kind of has this erie feeling (in a good way)

can't wait to see what happens next

Good chapter, I liked it. There was only one small thing, where you had her call her dad Andrew, instead of dad, in like...the middle of the chapter.

Otherwise than that, good job. It's all very mysterious. Keep it up!

Faith

Very mysterious. I can't wait to find out why everyone is so...weird.

Oh, I noticed that you switched from calling him dad to Andrew back to dad (at the part when they're in the truck). I wasn't sure if that was on purpose or just an accident. Update soon please!

great start! It's Very interesting so far. I really like the length of the chapter(its good to see a chapter that more then 200 words)

keep writing

Nicole

Very interesting. I like it so far. Keep it up and update soon.

Faith