good writing but Les is a little too Artemis Fowl-like. Both 14. Black Hair. High E ON!

Cool, chapter, I like how clueless his dad is. xD
If I had a kid and I saw him just kind of go into the computer, I would be pretty freaked out, I must say. But then again, I'd also be all "Hey, it's like Tron! Sweet!"

Hey there! I like your story so far, as you could probably guess by the fact that I'm reviewing it (I don't flame).
I can't wait to find out more about this game and Les. What's gonna happen next? Dun dun... Update soon! :)