|Reviews for Desire|
| TinyMusicalShore 11/8/08 . chapter 1
Oh. That was awesome.
| deefective 10/18/08 . chapter 1
Oh wow. This whole entire piece just FLOWS so well. I read it out loud and not once did I trip over a word. Nicely arranged, indeed.
"Feast of flesh. I want. I want."
That line right there takes the cake. Not only does it create amazing imagery and atmosphere to the whole piece but the fact that the second "I want" is in italics emphasizes the whole feel of the narrator. You can tell that this person really has a desire.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
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| Jubbles Bubbles 10/15/08 . chapter 1
Good emphasis in the right words. 'Flattered' was great.
| aprettywar 9/23/08 . chapter 1
this is fantastic. you've conveyed very strong and passionate imagery, and i think it works quite well. keep up the good work!
| Narq 9/17/08 . chapter 1
hey, this is Narq from Akano-Narq. it should be a semi-colon after the groping hands.
oh, I like this very much
| Faith Adeline 9/17/08 . chapter 1
very, very good piece. I loved it.
| a certain slant of light 9/17/08 . chapter 1
Love the two last lines of the first stanza, and the two last lines of the third stanza xD I really like this one. Very much so. )