|Reviews for Chasing August|
| Guest 5/12/13 . chapter 6
"His money just couldn't wrap around the conversation he had with the boy at the little country restaurant."
His money? Seriously? I'm assuming you meant his mind but I just don't know how that mistake can even be made. And there were A LOT of mistakes like that in these chapters. Know when it should be no. Beak when it should have been beet. And many others. If you don't have a beta at least read over your chapter out loud to try and catch these obvious errors. I think you got a bit carried away with descriptions also. Too much description can get boring after a while. We don't need every detail of what something looks like. Overall it wasn't bad, but it wasn't what it could have been (imo) either. And what happened to the sequel? If you got bored with the story, you could have at least wrote an epilogue to let us know what happened.
| Azrael Adamine Gaunt 3/25/13 . chapter 13
This was a really beautiful story. I thoroughly enjoyed it! It's full of love, lust, problems, and life in a real kind of way-I give you kudos on the bittersweet and hopeful ending and the story's overall composition! This was, by far, the best slash story I have read on fictionpress to date, so I will eagerly be checking out your other work. I wanted to say that I really liked Bo, Laurence, and Ashley's characterizations. I think you could have developed Audrey a bit futher, but you didn't need to because she was pretty much a minor character, therefore it makes sense. Tying in the title with the last few sentences of the story? Pricelessly cute; it made me smile. If you have time to go through the story once more, I would scout out some spelling mistakes-the largest I saw was mixing up to and too, which really isn't a crime, but it can distract the reader and punctuate the flow of them envisioning the story line. ...What else can I say? I LOVED THIS STORY SO MUCH! :) Please, continue writing in general.
| obsessedreadr 11/25/12 . chapter 13
;_;. Please, there must be a sequel, right!? I shall check your profile after this.
/nice smexy scenes you got going on there. ;x
It really annoyed me how everyone was acting... however, I did understand it. BUT BLOODY EFFING LAURENCE *death glare ensues*.
Lovely writing. I will most definitely be reading your other stories... be expecting a favourite and follow author!
Oh... and sorry, I don't review every chapter. I'm just... SO eager to read the next chapter.
| theStarfly 10/24/12 . chapter 9
I'm enjoying the story in this, and the buildup of relationships. There are definitely a lot of spelling errors, but having just read one of your newer stories, I just chalk it up to this being one of the older ones. Yay for Bo and Ashley!
| JHeartbreak 8/6/12 . chapter 13
I was a little apprehensive about reading this story, after my bad experience with “Kingdom Come”, but I totally loved this one. I loved Bo and the relationship they had. I guess the main draw was seeing them come together, and what that would mean; I’m really excited to see what “Seattle Rain” is like.
Weak points: Laurence is a little too douchey, that it makes me wonder how Ashley got together with him, unless Ashley had suicidally low self-esteem. He’s just unbelievably bad. So maybe if he were more multi-dimensional, or you were to show the reasons why Ashley was willing to settle for him, it would be more convincing.
I thought sometimes Ashley acted like he wasn’t much older than Bo. I know he treats Bo like an equal, but even then, he seems to live his life as a teenager. Maybe you’re still really young and don’t know what it’s like to be thirty? Maybe.
But Ashley and Bo together are so multi-sided, full of give and take, full of tensions and things, that the story as a whole held together completely. So now that I know how good you can be, I’ll probably be reading more. Sorry for judging you based on one story I didn’t like.
| Mcgde 7/29/12 . chapter 13
That was the sweetest ending to a story I have ever read :') you seriously made me cry...
| littlerose222 6/21/12 . chapter 13
I loved this story. So much. I'm just about to read the sequel and saw that you have it set a on hiatus and I hope you will start writing that story again someday because I really want to see the end of this story.
| anon 5/15/12 . chapter 4
I am rereading the story. It's been a while but I'm enjoying it. Just wanted to let you know this is the second time I've noticed you write "daunting" instead of "doting." The meanings are quite different.
| Naruto-junky from Fanfiction 5/11/12 . chapter 13
I really enjoyed this story. It will stick with me for a long time. Your characters and writing was so real. At first I was a bit wary about the age difference when it was first brought up, but I really liked it.
| daisylou 5/3/12 . chapter 1
I just read this in one go and immediately found out after two chapters that I would love this series to bits 3
thank you for sharing such OSMness. Now I'm off to read the sequel B)
| binny 4/21/12 . chapter 13
Oh GOD. feelings. i have so much feelings
| binny 4/21/12 . chapter 8
| Marie-Cecile 2/29/12 . chapter 13
I'm not crying. No, I just have some dust in my eye.
That's fucking SAD. And he fiiiiiiinally said it. "I love you Bo", that was so romantic. But you're a little bit cruel. Poor Bo. But I must admit that the story just couldn't end like that. Both of them going to Seattle "happily ever after", it wouldn't have been right. I'm going to read the sequel :D !
| Marie-Cecile 2/29/12 . chapter 12
Oh, god, I want to cry. Laurence is such a bastard. And why can't Ashley just tell Bo that he loves him ? Aaaah ! And why Bo told his parents he was planning to go to Seattle with Ashley ? He's an idiot ! They're never going to let him go now !
I'm reading the next chapter. I'll beg so that they can be together.
| Raaawr Ima Dinosaur 10/19/11 . chapter 13
This was so sad. I just wanted to burst in tears...but I didn't because I'm half a wake...you didn't need to know that ; anyways, amazing story! :D