I think you did very well for your first time. Very well indeed. I'm positive that you'll get better as you go. DarkLadyKnight writes the best yaoi lemons on fic press. You should check her stories out if you haven't. I wouldn't mind a prequel. Maybe you could tell us how the two of them got together starting with the drunken kiss? Please let me know if you write a prequel.

You are really good.:3
Slash rocks.