loved it, so much imagery i think that this piece would make our eglish teacher proud *haha vocab sentences*

I like the way the story flows, but still each stanza is really kinda different. Also like your word choice of atrophy, that was great. I also liked your descriptions, especially "sunset bleeds through the grass"

Nice job!

Odd piece. I liked it though, the idea of the jack in the box. Good work.

very well done rhyme is very good and rythhim is very well kep and the edescription is great too. Good job.

Mandi(loversdream17)

hm, very interesting indeed...i like the idea of fame and wealth as a poorly played game