 Zijue 2008-09-21 . chapter 1I like the conversational tone of this poem - it seems even more accusatory and pointed, as you're talking directly to this person. Not only that, but I get the sense that the "saint" is justifying themselves, rationalising away their materialism. These justifications come across as excuses in your poem, making their motives seem dubious.
An interesting, well-structured poem. |