I dont think that there's really much I could say about this that would do it any justice. Its broken in a perfect way.

i really like this. the formatting is amazing and its just got so much emotion packed into it...it really touched me.
-liz

this was lovely. i like your poem voice and Everything about it. there were so many plays between the words i was amazed (again) wonderful job

I think you went a bit overboard with the formatting in some places, especially when you used bolding, italicizing and underlining and periods all at once. I also think some of the stanzas are screaming for punctuation.

"it spilled us into end of/august"... isn't it the end?

I really like the first two lines and the part like that in the middle. Those were really powerful. Your descriptions are as always great and the point you make is very true and nicely done.

Good piece. I really liked it. Keep it up :)
Faith

"but maybe i'm just lying. maybe i'm living, maybe i'm dying, maybe i've been dead all along, dead like you..." that was my favourite part. It left me thinking about so many things in my own life, which is the sign that the poet has connected to the reader, so good work :)

Very powerful!
I love all the formating used.
Perfect.
Stay strong ! -hug-
:)