oh my god, what a sad,but powerful poem. i really enjoyed every line of it. the opening was awesome. the descriptions made me see everything and the ending was powerful. nice work:)

that was amazing. i loved so many lines i cant even begin to choose which was my favorite. Amazing.

Pretty words and a deep portrayal of childhood innocence. repetition is nice, a tiny bit overdone maybe - i like the "bigbig" hill, not so much of the "blue blue" skies.
last stanza is a great conclusion. nicely done~

"because we felt more like grown ups/that way."... I really don't think you need the "that way" it doesn't seem necessary, and it sounds a bit awkward.

"after the rain came/and went."... the came and went sounds awkward as well

I'm iffy about the repetition of the words. It got to be a bit much.

That said I really like the piece. Your descriptions of childhood actions were really true, but not cliched at all. The rest of the piece was great as well, nicely written and I like the format.

wow amazing job writing this. i liked that it was in paragraph structure but the words and punctuation made it flow really nicely.
i liked the part about feeling free because i love that feeling and i remember it so well. the ending was very sad...great poem! i loved reading it!

heartbreakingly tragic. overall, a good write ;)

that was just tragic but adorable in a way ;)

you use very pretty words
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i like them.