Lol, Matt. i totally kicked your cat's ass in pet society. please don't corrupt jamie! he was a little angel and you and your pervertedness are perverting him!
You horny butt.

"looking for pooh" xD. You crack me up.

:O I didn't know you had a facebook account. Add.

Hmm...well, the first half of the chapter seemed a little overdone. I got the impression that you'd created a 'world', so to speak, and you didn't leave much about it to the imagination? For example: "They called each other by the first letter of their names, which was the same letter of their sins."

The second half of the chapter was pretty good though :). An interesting take on waking up in hell.

I don't think though, having read in so much, that this is my kind of story :(. I might carry on with it, but I'm not sure of it :/. I'm sorry.

From your reviews, and the setting, I'm guessing your first language isn't English? If that's the case, then you did a very good job writing all of this :). There were, admittedly, quite a few grammar issues and a couple of misspelled words, but those are easily sorted out with a beta reader.

In terms of the way you set out the story (the structure of it): I personally didn't like the whole 'putting a space between each line', but that's maybe just me! How you structure your story isn't really something to criticise :D.

I suppose, as plots come and go, this isn't the most original, but at times you do have some very powerful sentences. I just think that some of them could do with being a little more...varied? You start too many sentences with the same word, e.g. 'I'.

Overall though, it's not bad at all! I'll read the next chapter (y).

Ha. You's a bitch. Love it.

Fuck you, Matt. I hate his name his fucking "Rafe". Couldn't you think of anything else? For fuck's sake..

I like it, but take it slow.

Wow, I like this story. It has an original plot and the characters are amazing. I'd like to see more of the others sins anyway. The main character is amazing as well, the way he freaks out but tries to keep it cool.. And the writing is excellent. It's quick, easy to follow... The english is a bit choppy though, but it definately works

Great Chapter. Great Story. Continue with it.

-Monster

I love this. You're amazing, Luka is adorably grumpy in a rather sexy way? Like, all the characters so far are sexy (with the expection of Nat... ew!!), Rafe being all mysterious and bitchy, Lance being all horny and seductive... I love theway you write it. It's sharp, and easy to read, without being too fast. But it definately doesn't bore me. Can't wait for the next one!

Amazing and original story. Continue

:O!!

Nice, nice, nice.

Worth the wait ;)

Please update soon?

FINALLY!

DUDE! i love you! this was amaziing, please update son?? im so pro luka-rafe... please?!?!?!?!?!?!

Finally... Good one. Well, it was kind of a filler? But gave us a good view on this Lance guy.

Is it me or is Luka very similar to his creator... In every sense?

Keep it up, kid. (19 is still in the kid range for me)

And next time try not to make me wait like 4 months?

Thanks.

- Vile.

By the way.. sexy picture in your profile. You should've put a colour one though.

This story is incredible so far. The plot is perfect, ythe sins are perfectly characterized, dude! a little work and this could actually get published for real!