Review game!
I love the imagery and language you use... sometimes it is absolutely poignant and beautiful ("The white daisies placed on top of her grave by her mourning parents, a symbol of the innocence they had lost, were picked up by the sea breeze and they spiralled, one by one, up into the bright, blue, cloudless sky.") Other times, it borders on childish ("See, I'm carrying it! Okay, okay, fine.")

Also, take some more time to develop your characters. While you really explained the setting well, the characters were less exposed and the reader had less time to get to know them... but I'm just a reader, I shouldn't tamper with the story's flow. All in all, great work and an interesting plot. Can't wait to see where you go with this.