my favorite line was the last; "that black and white stage, staining it with red." very vivid, very eerie.

a grammatical error in "What do you mean your leaving?" (it should be "you're") but easily overlooked. fantastic job.

~LL~

This, staring at the freaking wonderful thing you've written here, wall-eyed and gasping for at least a small amount of air, this is what reading should feel like! God, this is brilliant! It's the kind of literature every living person should read, no, should be obliged to read! I can't believe this, way to go :)

gah. amazement. somber. melancholy. beautiful. i don't knwo where to start, maybe i'll rant but i think you wouldn't like that. its lovely and its perfect.

-eve