Interesting use of person! I like it. This is very poetic - you could probably have posted it as a poem, too, if you changed the format a little! I really enjoyed reading it, it flowed well and I knew exactly how the 'you' in the piece felt all the way through. Nice. Keep writing ]

This is an interesting piece. I think it might be vastly improved if you removed the commanding first person, switching to an omniscient third or even a personal first person.

J.

Fantastic as ever. Honestly.

But you didn't need anyone to tell you that - you should know by now.

I love the whole second person thing. It's haunting, in every possible way - sad haunting, beautiful haunting, memorable haunting.

I think you're taking over my Favourite Stories list, honestly. Do you ever write anything less than perfect?

(:

Amazing.

This review will be useless because I don't know what else to say about this piece. But it was amazing.

-stix-

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