Creepy... i little fast moving but good... update ;)

I feel as though i might throwup!! you must come up with better titles!! consult me first! comon i know you are smarter then that!

lol, nice. Unlike the ppl below me, I got the shift of scenes. I think that this is interesting and funny in a weird way. Keep going!

luv,
Glory
ps- I like the Zippidy touch =] Mark would be pleased.

I'm new here--can't submit my own writing until tomorrw at like 3:45 or something, so...I decided to read a bit. I came across your piece and I was a little confused, I must confess, because the protagonist was talking to a police officer, and then suddenly, he was in his bedroom. It didn't seem like a conversation, and if it was meant to be a flashback, perhaps some sort of preamble to make the reader understand what's going on. Just a thought, seriously, what do I know? :-) Keep writing. Kimmer

I liked it i was a little confused when it changes scenes but it was clever the way you did that. intrigued ;)