This was so very sweet.
Simple and sweet

~Yusuf

Aw...That is so sweet...

~Wings~

Aww, this is completely adorable! Great work!

really nice and very good imagery i could really picture this whole thing. Nicely Written

Your capitalization is really odd. You start with doing the first word of every line, but then towards the middle you stop. Then you start again, but stop in the last line. I would try to keep it consistent.

-"A hard day and my tears over flow"... overflow
-"I leaned up and whispered' All I ever needed was you'"... whispered, 'All.."
-"and he whispers ' All I ever needed was you'"... whispers,
-"Walking down the isle was the best"...aisle

You kinda of confuse me by switching from him to you. Are they the same people or different?

Still, I think the piece is really sweet and I like the repetition of the whispered thing, it's adorable.

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Sweet. ^_^

I like the thing with "was you" sweet and maybe there's a lot of meaning.

There were a few grammar mistakes, but in general this is adorable.
great job!!

Your right. That was a cute story. I like the part where he picks up their daughter at the end. It warmed my heart indeed. I just loved it. Keep up the good work!!

Cute.
Minor typo. The word that should say our says "out."

Aw...so sweet! Every girl dreams of that day...(well, if not every girl, I certainly do)