I loved this story even though it made me cry buckets. The way that you described everything was amazing and the plot line was really great. Jamie is such a easy character to empathise with that you just sort of flow into the story and you don't have to spend the first few chapters trying to figure out what sort of person he is. I also liked the details ,which mapped the progression of their relation-ship really well. Truth be told i love all your writing not only because you say mum instead of mom but because they are really beautiful works of art :D. Thank you for writing ll your stories and i hope you will continue to amaze me :D

"What we've got here is a failure to communicate." [Cool Hand Luke, 1967]

This story made me sad.
I think you are a great writer. I loved all the little details that revealed how they would have made up whenever they had little disagreements and how they no longer have those sweet moments anymore.
It was a great story on how couples grow apart when they don't discuss and resolve their differences. For example, Jamie did not seem to have ever spoken to Jason about the fact that he didn't like how Jason was behaving towards the waiters and not the price of their bill. Jamie just went with it, even though he wasn't happy. From Jamie's point of view Jason is selfish and arrogant but I think that it is also revealed through Jamie's narrative that he is also selfish and using Jason in his own way. Jamie doesn't want to face up to the end of their relationship even after Jason has breached the subject and is already chasing Rick because he is afraid of what not having Jason's material support would mean for him.
It's more poignant because it seems like they could have had something special together or they could have separated before it came to Jamie cheating.
That Jamie's affair was discovered when Jason was at his lowest just added that extra angst, made the story more grey and heart-wrenching.

That is so sad. I thought Jamie could do better than Jason because he felt so kept, but by the end I wasn't sure anymore. They didn't understand each other, but more because they didn't talk rather than because they didn't care.

the narration is really straightforward, matter-of-fact, and blunt, but it still manages to be angsty, and i love that. it's like angst without any whining and **.

I totally love this story, especially Jason's reaction to the cheating. He sounds like a bad guy, but a completely lovable character, which reminds me a lot of my (ex)boyfriend.

Most people don't write stories about relationships that grow stale and die, let alone write them this beautifully. Great job!

oh my god~~this one is so horrible..i cant seem to even breath when im finish reading it..im depressed now~i want to cry ~..
but...
the good part is...
YOU ARE SO GOOD AT THIS~!... i mean REALLY good at this..a brilliant writer!..but right now im depressed!..write one with happy ending please!!

After leaving you twelve reviews with little mention of food, this one is going to have some.

If I'm having toast with jam it always has butter on it. Not that I have that all that often. I leave the butter off when having scones, though.

Looked up Bonne Maman... which apparently has an asterisk after it? Weird. M... preserves.

They sell Coke (the drink) in remote Mongolia alongside such staples as vodka and potatoes.

And I just finished reading this story and have realised that I don't get it. I think I understood it up until the last sentence. Why the fifteenth? I think I missed something. Le sigh.

=) Mandraco.

This story makes my heartbox hurt. The way you've written this is amazing, i feel sorry for both of them and angry at the same time. I always enjoy your work. :)

Oh, the heartbreak, the heartbreak... I feel sad, but I'm not sure who I feel sad for. It's just the situation, I guess. I'm insanely impressed that you managed to get so much into such a short text. The first-person POV really works, since it allows that little wham! at the end (bear with me, I'm only half-way through my morning coffee at the mo)... What I mean is that there's nothing dramatic behind their relationship failing, is there? Jamie gets to tell the story, so as the reader, one buys into the idea that it's Jason who changed, Jason's turned into a bastard, Jason this and that. I'm sure from Jason's perspective the story would have been very similar in substance if not in details. But we don't hear anything of Jason's problems and thoughts until the second to last paragraph, hence the wham! you know? Puts the text leading up to it in perspective.

Anyway, adorable read - even if it made me a little sad. :) (Err, yeah, the smiley on the end there emphasises my sadness... Obviously...)

Toodles.

This is pretty fantastic. Just like you.

Those two should have split up ages ago. Frankly as much of an ** as the naratior is, his boyfriend wasn't much better. Can we have the "one year later running into each other in a street"?

you have just utterly toyed about with my sympathies...i'm not even sure where they lie at the end of this. i am fundamentally against cheating on a partner, but i can kind of understand why jamie does. and jason seemed like quite the ** all through, treating jamie as he did. but the ending really twisted me up about it.

i worry that my bias in jamie's favor is because it was his voice through which i heard the story. i sympathize with his frustration over jason and their relationship, but at the same time, if they had ever just -talked- about things rather than ignoring them, perhaps it wouldn't have ended up as badly as it did. yes, i think jamie was a fool, but i also think it's unfair to him that the guilt seems to be solely on his shoulders at the end of it.

i don't know...you've left me a bit divided over this. but it was quite good, as usual. once again, you've fully drawn me into your world and gotten me emotionally involved. so kudos to you! :)

This was very good. I love how your characters seem so real, even though this wasn't long you managed to make me feel really attactched to them. The ending though... I knew all along that they probably wouldn't have worked out but I still felt slightly devestated at the end, especially because Jamie regretted everything. Then there was the fact that Jason lost his job, and... Wow I'm actually trying not to cry here.

But to sum up I did really enjoy reading this, even though it was very emotional.

I...I want to cry.

It's not trying to be sad which makes it even more sad and ah. It's well written but the next time I read it I'm playing loud pop music for hours beforehand.

In my head they get back together and live happily ever after.

But I do like your ending. Realistic.