1) "My hands moved with a life of their;"

(Um, I might be wrong, but I assume that you've intended to type "their own".)

2) I think that you've chosen the perfect POV for this story. (1st person POVHeightened horror)

3) Emily is so young, yet so cunning. Argh, her life has ended too soon.

CREEPY! OMG, I had goosebumps crawling all over me! It was such a scary story... no, not scary, just... creepy? ;)

Narq.