Hi

really like this story. can't wait for the updates.

:)

more please I enjoy this story a lot

i love your story, but i was a little bummed to see that you have not updated in a while! but ill add it to my favorites anyway and hope you post up another chapter soon!! please & thank you:)

Dude, why has this not continued?!

-Mags

I really like your story Midnight Moon. I'm writing a werewolf love story myself as well. Please continue writing and keep up the good work. Your a fabulous fighter.

This chapter was extraordinary. It had a lot of detail containing each character of the story and what they were doing. I defiantly thought it was well thought out and I want to see and hear more of this story. If might be publish I would defiantly buy a copy of the book. I'm sure it would be a great seller. Visit me at this website:
/user/profile/1283875/annaivi/

I love this story. It is addicting

Hi there.

Your grammar and punctuation have some mistakes in this chapter, for example here:
"She blushed and pulled back, wishing that, in this moment, she could shape shift into a gopher and dig a tunnel far away fromGabriel."
and here:
"he licked her lips, and his blood scorched is veins at the image of her pretty tongue licking him."
Over all this is not bad, but the little things can be off putting.

The adjectives you use are mostly the ones that are always used with those nouns. This robs powers from what you are trying to say. For example "Sleek, grey fur" and "thick scent" are commonly seen together and make your narrative less intense.

Also, I felt this chapter was fairly cliche. Your main character hates the male who is awful to her (understandable) but is also sexually attracted to him and goes to him for protection which is not only sexist but a common staple of romance novels.

Having said some not so nice things, I should say that I like the pacing of this chapter. The action is continuous and the ending is cliffhanger-y enough to draw people to the second chapter.

-Double Plus Special

This is really nice so far.

I like how you illustrated the meeting and I think that you did an excellent job of portraying each of the character's emotions.

I look forward to learning more about Quinton, as he didn't have too much to do with the chapter but he as well as the other three males, especiallt Kisten now, have definetly peaked my interest.

Again, nice work with this, I look forward to reading more!

I don't tend to read a lot of werewolf stories so when I came across this, I wasn't sure what to expect. However, I am in fact glad that I came across this story.

You've built a nice foundation for the story and you imagery and details in general make this an easy and enjoyable read.

I especially liked your first few paragraphs describing Victoria's change and her emotions during the process; nice work.

Gabriel's arrogance is fascinating to me and I'm sure he'll be an interesting character and that being said, I look forward to seeing their relationship develop.

One of the only things snoticed that I might would change in this chapter, is a line where you have:

(fromGabriel.)
-There should be a space.

In general, I think you've done a nice job with this story so far and as such, I look forward to reading more.

Nice work.

I Like, I Lust, I Love!!Please Update Soon!!

OMG OMG OMG! ok can not wait to read the next chapter. hopefully a longer chapter. lol. plz update soon

I like were and romance stories. Your story is both, it is well written and interesting. So, please update it as soon as possible.

Soo good and soo abandoned. Please, please don't abandon this story.