'crashing in the horizon"... I felt like it should be into

I really like the first two paragraphs, the imagery are absolutely beautiful. The rest of it was interesting, you can relate to the person and you explain the situation. However, I think you should continue with the descriptions in some way because it seems odd to start off so poetically and then switch it off completely. Still, it's a really great piece.

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"He doesn’t know. You didn’t tell him. He loves someone else, anyway, so what would be the use in letting him know. It would only complicate matters." How i can relate to this phrase...i think you captured the emotion well. keep writing. loved it

They really SHOULD have a genre for heartbreak.
Good point.

I loved this!
Great job.

I liked this piece. Simple, yet says a lot. Great job :)
Faith