 S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G. 2008-11-10 . chapter 1Hauntingly good. I like that it had a hopeful ending.
Your style is good, and the only "critique" I can give (not really a critique, more advice) is that the punctuation you did use was well placed, and if you were to use more of it and not capitalize all the letters at the beginning, I think it would put more emphasis on each line. But of course, that's only me talking, it's definitely not wrong to not use punctuation. :)
Overall, I enjoyed this. Kudos. |