|Reviews for Loss|
| simpleplan13 10/18/08 . chapter 1
The last line is 6 syllables, which isn't right. Also, I think repeating the word empty twice in such a small piece is way too repetitive.
I do like the piece, the idea is very relateable and the word disheartened is a really great choice.
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| PoetryQueen 9/29/08 . chapter 1
I liked this. The first line is really good. The only thing I didn't like was how you started a line in 2 and finished it in line 3. But still, this was different, I liked it, so good job!