Just wonderful!

"but you know maybe's only a guess and

it'll always be the only thing I can give."

&

"Eyelashes flutter for

better beginnings and you are spinning."

-Breath taking lines.

I enjoyed reading this. I like the rhyming and repetition.

Great job.

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I like the three-part format. (I like) the repetition of that stanza, which, by the way, is awesome.

...It's different. It's pretty.

this kind of poem is very different to a lot of your other work, but you do it very well. i do like the last paragraph (and the first time that paragraph is written.) i like this piece a lot :D well done.

I like the sort-of rhyme scheme. It was very laid back and relaxed, and went really nicely with the bittersweet tone you have. I love the stanza you used twice; it was my favourite, and it was a great technique to repeat it at the end.