 Animate84 2009-08-21 . chapter 4Nice story set-up this is.
I have Aspergers too. So this is almost to my earlier years too, although not at Towa-chan's age.
I noticed a lot of autistic characters in your fics.
Overall, this is sweet and worth reading. |
 QuothTheWren 2009-08-18 . chapter 4Wren back again! I'm really sorry I haven't been able to review sooner, I haven't been on FP for months cos of schoolwork. Anyway, I think your story's really starting to develop, and your writing style- I noticed it even in these last two chapters :) It was also really good to see a bit more of Hikaru's life- I'd be interested to know if the gunman at his parents' concert is a major plot point (if there's anything more to be revealed about why he was there in the first place, or if it was more for an interesting and emotional way for Hikaru to become an orphan.)
Also, I'd commend you (again? sorry for not reviewing before) for details about autism (I think they were in chapter 3.) You obviously know what you're talking about, and it's really good to understand.
Finally (just my opinion) I personally would really like to see Towa and Hikaru growing up together (or seeing their stories intertwine as they both get older) because I think it would be really neat to see how both their characters develop.
Nice work on these last two chapters!
Wren |
 QuothTheWren 2009-01-14 . chapter 2Hello! I don't know if I've said this already, but I really do like the fairytale-style parts in italics- they tie the events together, really well. Also, I think you wrote Towa and Hikaru's next meetings well0- they seem like something which would actually happen, and were believable. Altogether, I like how events are progressing so far- good job! :D |
 QuothTheWren 2008-12-14 . chapter 1Kawaii! An interesting story-the interludes with Towa as the snow princess were well-written, and were my favourite parts. It did seem a little artificial how all the characters were introduced- their whole names called out by their classmates and others, which I haven't seen happen often- but I did like the way you provided detailed descriptions of them. Well done! |
 Oni-Kita 2008-10-20 . chapter 1This is a very promising story - it definitely hooked me. I have a mildly autistic brother, and I can see some of him in Towa's actions and mannerisms. You did a good job capturing that.
There were a couple of spots where the flow was a bit awkward and it did distract me a bit, but overall it was pretty good (if you want to have someone edit your chapters for you - which can be pretty helpful, since a different set of eyes might catch a mistake you missed - I'd be more than happy to do it for you).
I can't wait to read more! |
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