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Reviews For: On Listening to Another Lit Theory Lecture
simpleplan13 2008-10-08 . chapter 1
"That listening to/Your words, as I intently do,"... this line break seemed odd to me, which kinda made the rhyme seem a bit forced
"Singing idle tunes, watching ages/Pass by. Maybe we"... same with that one

I also didn't like how you use parrot and rot and then parrotting and rotting cause the repetition seems odd and it doesn't really rhyme.

I did like the piece. Your descriptions were really great and I liked most of the rhyming. I also liked the random alliterations like in the first line and "caged canaries" and "canary classroom" Nicely done.
Scarlett Wynter 2008-10-08 . chapter 1
Ha! don't I know the feeling!
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