I think you have a really great story here. A little pointer though, I think you should develop your characters a little more because right now all three girls are an unit, all the same. Otherwise your story is great
Silently 2008-10-04 . chapter 1
Well... It certainly would've been better if it wasn't in script format. It just didn't really flow.. But it was pretty goo.d I'd never be good at horror. ^^