"your only poisoning"... you're
"your sure to open them later"... you're

I like this piece, the idea behind it is interesting. I also like your formatting, the punctuation, line breaks and the combining of those three words were really great. I also like the ending, giving them a choice. The only thing I didn't like was your lack of apostrophes, but that's a personal preference.

PS If you're bored check out the Review Game forum and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile).

I like the beginning, the imagery really grabbed my attention. I think it's lacking a little flow, though, maybe work with the words a little and the punctuation? I think that your contrasting with wither/pretty/delicate and barbed wire/cutting/beating paints a nice contrasting picture for the imagery, but I'd like to see a little more with the 'delicate' side of things to feel a little more connection to the girl. And I DEF like the last stanza, good job. :)

wow, just wow.
can anyone say story of my life?
ur not rusty at writing dude, this is definately one of ur best.

you're missing a few apostrophes, but that's just grammar stuff.

overall, the words are beautiful as ever. i'm not really sure if the last line is necessary; i think it would close better at "and be alright", but that's just me.

k.X

ps
i just realized that you haven't written anything since i had my spazz attack =/