 simpleplan13 2008-10-18 . chapter 1I really like your rhyme scheme, it's interesting and you do it subtly, also how it changes in the chorus is a nice differentiating thing. However, I don't like how it changed in the last stanza, that seemed out of place.
The piece is nice, relateable and well done.
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