Aw; Lovely ending.

I really loved "But strangley, I don't want me back." I like how you formatted this peice, loved the way you wrote it, and your word choice as always, was perfect. You wonderfully brought out your point, Very nice work. :D

Rolliepollie44

Oo. This one's a bit angry, i like that and I love the words in parentheses. Interesting title choice. I like it, it's creative and I love the tie to it in the ending stanza. I like the simple start with just the "I love you.". Great job. :)

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Another very relatable one. I like how this one is kind of like a letter, and how all the lines are just simple but their still poetic. I like all the little thigns you threw in their like mountain dew and mistletoe and I love how much passion this has. Nice work. :)

Rolliepollie44

Okay. This one is offically my new favorite. Even though I really do love them all. This one is very relatable, it's pretty, flows nicely, and it's simplicity just forms it's beauty. I can't even describe this one I just love it. :)

Rolliepollie44

Great questioning in the middle. I like the whole "Why am I less then my whole self, anyway?" But then I like how at the end you say I will not let anything end in a question. Great work, it's really complex and a bit hard to make sense of unles you think about it but it's gorgeous work. Nice!

Rolliepollie44

This is so cute. It's happy and I lovee the ending. Just the last four words are so powerful. I also like the part about running in the rain. It sets the mood perfectly for it. The descriptoins in this one are really powerful, the emotion unleashed is, I love how close this one is, and I bet a lot of people could really relate to this one. Made me feel happier then I was when I started reading it. :)

Rolliepollie44

I like the drum part to this one. Something about the beat I got in my head when you described it. This peice is sad and it's.. dark but in a really light way because you threw in the white bird. I like the description about the glass wall all scratched and blurry and then the person leaving. Really cool peice, this is one of my favorites. :)

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This one is a true hit on reality. I like how simple the theme is but how BAM you wrote it. I like the simple little details about music and the fan. It adds so much and the ending. I like that. It's relaxing, and kind of depressing but.. at the same time it's romantic. Nice work. :)

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I really like the theme. It's different and a great way to describe love. I like the battle, battlefield comparison and the way you portray love as a struggle but then at the end you kind of call it a war and say that you can either win it or everything will crumble. Very well written the descriptions get you lost in a good way, like a whole different point takes over you. I know i'm not a very loving person so it kind of made me think of how wonderful love is.

I really like the title to each part. They drew me in. Part V was my favorite even though it was all good I just really liked how you ended the peice and it was a good way to end the whole thing. It wasn't awkward at all.. very cut to the chase and although it was lengthy you didn't have a lot of extra so it all worked out well. I really like this. :)

Rolliepollie44

Wow. Nice ending to it, I love the "snowflake melting on my jacket, and the title echoes in my head again." line. Such great imagery that creates, I really like this one, it's.. pretty and such a great way to describe reading. In fact I had to read it twice just to take all the descriptions and comprehend them. Beautiful, beautiful work! :)

Rolliepollie44

Ah! That's so sad. I'm sorry to hear about your cousin. It's very descriptive peice, it's stunning really. Amazing word choice and amazingly written. I love the emotoin it holds. Very beautiful. :)

Rolliepollie44

this is the chapter I like more, it's powerful, it's as if screaming "I love you, I love you" is full of strenght.

this is like self conflict as if talk or not to that person, but I could relate those feelings.

I like these thoughts, are short and full of emotions.

happy new year.

These dream-like poems/ paragraphs are really good, although I didn't like the 5-part chapter. It did sound a bit much like rambling lol.

One thing I like about these paragraph thingies, especially the last one, is that they are like freestyle poetry without the forced forcelessness. They carry the weight and finality of a dream and its strange continuity, and express themselves without even trying, it seems.

Peace! Keep on writin!