Hm, I guess the storyline itself is alright, but the way you go about it seems slightly amature, no offense. You're writing style isn't the worst I've seen, but maybe you haven't really been doing it for a long time, maybe you're a bit younger, I don't know. Anyway, I suppose the whole stalker thing is different, but again, the way you go about it seems unrealistic.

There are a...few good points. You seem to catch the main character's feelings well enough. The rest of them, I'm just kind of oblivious except that Sonia's angry, Mark's her old friend. And, the way her and Darren got back together was kinda...meh.

Happy Writing

This chapter proves to me that you're either really new to writing or you write at the speed of light...

Either way, the only thing that will keep me reading from here is the storyline. I don't intend to be harsh, I'm just warning you.

You have an interesting style that seems to me to be between halfway developed and fully developed.

At times, it seems like your playing with ideas on how you want to set things out structure wise, especially with jumps between scenes and into the online conversation.

You say 'Cierra logs on' when possibly you should have said 'I logged on' or something. Again, this may be a part of your style, I hope to see the next chapter soon.

i like it so far first chapter, pretty short, but it's okay. i want to read more.