I love how you managed to keep the rhythm throughout.

and the italics in "you only meant the world to me" were awesome.

Amazing.

"Watch as my dignity fades." Beautiful line!

"You're smoke in the wind. Fragile." Brilliant metaphor!

I liked the last line too. It was almost...peaceful :)

"I'll take your broken memory

in stride and watch as my dig-

nity fades with the night. you

only meant the world to me."

wow this is absolutely beautiful. concise, perfection- so easily flowing and rhythmic. it struck me the most and its by far the most powerful stanza you have. the line breaks are incrediable, making it all just smooth and even when the lines fall onto the next. wonderful.

truly,

eve