Hnm, this story is getting more unpredictable as it goes on. That's pretty cool I got to say. Keeps things very interesting.

Good chapter, just needs lots and lots more detail. That would really help the most for it.

I technically read this last night, so this review is coming a bit late but now I'm finally going to get to you on it.

This is very compelling to say the least. The combination of the traditional Hindi/Indian mythology and the Shinto/Japanese mythology is very interesting and you tie the two together very well. You definitely get the "Asian" vibe going through here with this story. So that means your descriptions are absolutely amazing. Though I do think that this could use more detail, the good descriptions and nice story telling skills shown here definitely make up for it. That doesn't mean you shouldn't keep on adding more detail though.

On a final note, it was nice to read while listen to Zarasthura, a German black metal band I'm into. I doubt you care that much about it, but I think their song "Of Serpents and Swords" goes well with it.

Hope to see more.

cool :) I like how you've presented the myth in this. hope you keep writing!

aw cool, I love asian mythology! especially indian :) yay.