I'm not sure about your sanity, but whoever has the morbid smile certainly isn't.

Oh, I really love the imagery you created with those words. Very morbid and real. It adds a certain context to this piece that I don't know how to explain exactly, but it's good. Also, I like how every stanza begins with "No matter..." The poem doesn't rhyme but that adds a rhyming feel to it but in a good way that compliments the piece. Nicely done.

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'Your voice so sickeningly sweet"... I like that, it's a nice description and the alliteration is good

"Promises melting into lies"... I also like the word melting here, it gives you a great image

I like the piece, going through the senses like that. It would be kind of cool if you want through taste and sight as well. Still it's a great piece.

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Amazing! Totally love this!

"No matter how hard I shut my eyes
I can still see you
Your eyes beautiful but empty
Your face distorted by a morbid smile"

your last stanza is by far the most powerful.

truly,
eve