I don't like the haiku format. You have 5-7-7-5-7-5. That doesn't seem to make sense. I like the idea behind the piece, the hinting at abortion, but not actually saying it. It's also really sweet. I do kind of wish there was a bit more of emotion in here, but still it's a nice piece.

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this is precious and all too delicate.
its written so frankly its almost crude-
but its only sweet and lasting. i really like it.

truly,
eve

Glad you changed your mind ^_^ cute poem


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