aahahha cute story. poor human though >.> i really like how very organized everything is.

absolutely amazing! normally a lot of the things in this plot would turn me away, because i'm such a sucker for the stories that are happy throughout the entire thing and have a microscopic/nonexistant conflict. but sometimes i like stories that actually have conflicts in them, and i am SO glad i read this one. the ending is great and the characters are great. good job!

oh. um. that was a little graphic. okay.

i must admit, i saw the words homoerotic fantasy and automatically favorited your story. here's to hoping it's as fantabulous as the summary sounds!

Wow. This story was amazing. You did an incredible job of building the relationships between the characters- they never seemed forced or rushed. It was of course incredibly hot, and you had me seriously emotionally invested in the characters- I love how sweet and compassionate Jak is, and I'm so glad you resolved the issues between him and the fairies the way you did! It makes me sad that Maika's aura makes his lovers feel worthless, but it's consistent with what you wrote- I just don't like them feeling bad. I really hated Akitra to start with, you did an amazing job of redeeming him in my eyes. Also, even the secondary characters seemed well fleshed out, not just stand-ins because the school must be populated. I just read this all in one sitting, instead of studying- it's a good thing I'm well-prepared already! Great story, thank you for sharing it, and good luck with getting published!

I read your fiction 'broken wings' after I saw it had been nominated for the 'looking at the stars' award and I just wanted to say how much I loved reading it. A really excellent fiction; just the right mix of humour, sadness, suspence and romance.

I intend to track down the rest of your work and read it all as soon as possible. Thank you for posting this online, it's made my week.

THIS IS FLIPPING AWESOME! Why have I never found it before?

Some thoughts:

I am astounded at the number of times Jak came in this story, especially considering how many of them were on the same night (I'm thinking, in particular, of the night of the party). Good thing a "lust faerie" (sorry I such at remembering things - that's just an interpretation) was responsible for so many of them, that makes it plausible.

Your dedication and abilities are incredible.

Some of the best sex scenes I've ever read, definitely one of the top two penis inventions I've ever read (the other was on a giant humanoid lizard; it had one short, thick cock and one long skinny one that had a lizard tounge in the slit).

Loveable characters.

I'm now going to fail a French exam, a Theatre presentation, and a Writing essay. So worth it, screw college.

I don't mind that the subplots weren't all resolved, but I wouldn't be surprised if others did.

Fabulous, fabulous, fabulous. Time to go check if you followed through with that sequel.

Much love!

I love this story! It was really,really good! I found it on the LatS page, and it definitely deserved to be on there! I am very happy with the way it ended, although I would have to reread it for extraneous scenes... I love your writing style, and I can't wait for a sequel.
Much love,
.Unheard.

Just in case you still read your reviews, I'll just say this out loud: WOW.

That was epic. You're such an inspiring writer, you really just blow me away. I'm not such a good writer (or comment-er) so I don't have anything to criticize about the story, other than I absolutely loved Charias with Izeri and wish there were a couple more scenes on them. Congratulations and good luck with your future publications!

And by the way, I was devastated by the first chapter of Magebound-- I fell in love with the flow of the story BEFORE finding out it was only a teaser chapter! Definitely getting it off Amazon.

Aish x

I'm already in chapter 30 but i wanted to make a quick comment and which is to not delete the story if you are one of those authors because I would really like to finish reading this story, its great so far...and i have to say i thought it was so good that i had to peek onto the last chap to see who ended up together...and yay the two people i wanted for jak were the ones...and also im predictingt that izeri is going to end up with charan (the shark, if his name is not spelled the right way sorry) and if you read this excuse for all the errors im not a good writer, im just one of those people who's very good at spelling words

Whew I just read this whole story in two days! lol...

I really like it but you are right, some of the smaller stories in here do not get enough attention, like the vampire that they made friends with, you introduced him, gave him an interesting history to bring our attention to him then bam he disappears.

Also is the black fey a were shival? You gave tons of clues that he is, then you never address it at all. Its just sort of a loose thread... even if you plan on doing a fuller story about it later you should include at least a bit about it in this story to wrap up that loose end.


Overall though I LOVED this story =3 it is awesomeness! good luck with your career, I think your a great author and hope to have a paperback copy of this book one day ;)

im so happy. i got my three way where everyone wins! btw, i stayed up until three in the morning to finish this story. i must say, this fanboy is greatly impressed!

okay, to properly answer your questions:

1. no, i dont think that any scenes or chapters are boring but the one that i remember the most is when jak and akitra are first leaving the party, when they run into the shival/vamp. horse. that could be shortened up a bit.

2. YES! I LOVE THE ENDING! KEEP IT!

3. about the lose ends, for this story, its a good thing that you didnt tell the readers about everything. you stayed within perspective boundries which is good, very wise. about the sequel, you could start writing a shortened version of year two, with all the same characters and such.


also, i do like the joke about akitra telling maika to finish before dinner. if you really wanted me to scan your story, id have to nit pick and go through and reread everytyihng. but i dont think that most of your chapters should be changed at all.


much love and so much respect,

Kitty,
fanboy of yaoi

eh! so damn twisted!

so much for my idea for the twisted love triangle between them. all this and now poor jak will be alone. I WILL LOVE YOU JAK!

okay, that very last line could only be compared to high school girls gossiping!