Huh.

An interesting story so far!

This is a really good idea for a story, and as long as your character doesn't end up being a Mary-Sue than I'm happy.

Anyways, this was pretty short so there really isn't much to comment on. I didn't notice any typos or anything so good job with that.

I hope you actually update this~

--Jessie my l o v e
p.s. pay it forward

16 yet looks 12, is this supposed to be a flashback, or maybe she just looks younger than she actually is?

I'm interested to see in what happens next, keep up the good work.

I hope you can read my story "Dark Star" and leave a review. I would greatly appreciate your time and attention.

Signed
Kouta Aburame