|Reviews for The unanswered question|
| Kyllorac 12/7/08 . chapter 1
Freebie Review (finally)!
I really liked your choice of subject, mainly because I could relate to it very easily. "Where did the first word come from?" and "How were the other words made?" are questions I often wonder about. Still, though there are rules of language that everyone follows, I disagree that we are slaves to words. After all, how would we communicate without words? Even sign language uses words.
I enjoyed your use of repetition. It was visible enough to enhance the poem, but not so visible as to become annoying.
Something you might consider is playing around with the punctuation a bit. Right now, the punctuation is fine as is, but it doesn't add very much to the piece. For instance, "Night. Day." has more of an impact than "Night, day." Just a suggestion, though.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. It flowed well, and asked a question not many consider. The questioning in particular I enjoyed; too few people question.