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Erlkoenigin 2009-05-05 . chapter 3
a good haiku!
compet with mind would be a poem of its own accord,
Erlkoenigin 2009-05-05 . chapter 2
the headline is interesting, a very beautiful poem!
Erlkoenigin 2009-05-05 . chapter 1
great! I like the dual meaning of final!
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 20
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I like the idea of this piece. It is one everyone can learn from.

I didn't like the particular questions chosen to be used in the poem, though, because they're not the ones that make for great thinking.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 19
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I liked the contrast in this poem. It made for a nice flow.

I also liked the personal way the poem was presented. It was touching.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 18
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I liked the opening phrase because it was one I was familiar with and could understand.

I didn't like the theme of this poem because it it's overused.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 17
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I like the message of this poem. it brings about hope.

I liked the way you phrased the second line because it was beautiful.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 16
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I like the moment presented here. It's very real, if also very sad.

I didn't like how you kept saying the same thing over in over again in different words in the second line, though. It cut off the flow of the poem.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 15
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I liked the icy imagery used here. It made the poem feel cold.

I also liked how the poem made me picture a sword without ever mentioning blades or steel. It was a very sneaky and smart way to present the idea.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 14
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I like the idea for this poem because it was very clever and easy to understand.

I also like the theme because it represents a moment every can relate with.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 13
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I love the open-ended idea to this poem because it gave the reader a moment to use her mind.

I like you word choices here because they went together well.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 12
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I like the idea of this piece because it represents a moment everyone celebrates and loves.

I also liked you words choice. It gave the poem an original feel.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 11
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I love the variety of metaphors used here. They gave the poem a lovely image.

I also liked how you got so many ideas across in so few words. It gave the poem an original feel.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 10
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I love the clash of the idea and the words used- the idea is chaos, but the words are peaceful. It gave the poem a contradictory feel.

I also liked the ending line because it brought the piece to a nice halt after introducing the general idea.
Sercus Kaynine 2009-04-26 . chapter 9
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I like how you focused on just the freezing flower idea because it gave the poem it's own identity.

I also liked the alliteration used in this poem because it made the words flow smoothly.
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