aww i liked it...almost had me going that he would take her back...lol

GREAT use of imagery and adjectives...i could almost feel like i was THERE with them...

all in all i loved it...keep on writing =)

Loved it.

Loved the last line, especially.

You made break-up sound a weebit beautiful.

... Okay now that just sounded weird.

THAT WAS FUCKING AMAZINGLY BEAUTIFUL.
Bravo, my dear

Ya know...that was sad. I felt my heart rip in two, and it's all because of you (not really, I just wanted to rhyme). It's beautifully written. I hrt it.

Love ya mi cornchip!
TiffanyElizabethColonCopelandHardyColonCopeland.

Oh, so very sad. ='(

But it was well written, angsty. You had good characterization, but it started getting a little weak towards the end. I would have loved see a little bit more of his though process. If he loves her so much, what compells him to leave? Is just being not 'in' love the only reason? Or does he have other motives?

I really liked the way you kept referring to the night sky though. It was beautiful, and it kept a really nice flow throughout the entire piece.

Keep up the good work, and don't worry, depressing is often moving. And isn't it our job as authors to move readers so deeply that they can feel what we are trying to convay? =)

Happy writing.