That was very well written, and I liked the way you did the stanzas. I like this one: "At the grave I'll sit,

doodling and planting

hand made origami flowers.

Sticking macaroni glitter cards

that say 'I miss you'

to the head stone."

Very nice poem. :)

I really liked your poem.

To start, though, you had a grammer mistake. In the line "and the whole time your eyes are closed", you used the wrong 'your'. You said 'you're' which would mean you meant to say "and the whole time you are eyes are closed." The correct way is "and the whole time your eyes are closed". Unless, of course, you meant to do that.

Besides that, very beautiful, awesome imagary, very sad. The poem conveyed a lot of love for the person lost.

Thanks.

Beautiful, emotional. You convey imagery well.