it was nice both plot and descreption ... it would be nice to make a sequel

just to let you know. this made my ** day. :)

That was a unique oneshot, keep up the good work.

No no i like it... you are a good writer, alot of people think that to write a good slash you have to include the lemon but i think its better to leave some to the imagination *wink wink* i think you should definatly continue, if not with this story :D

Very cute! Love the couple.

pls pls pls pls continue this...pls..:) i want to know what happens next i am really interested in this story..so pls continue this..:)

Gawd, how awful. How could u write sumthing like this? EW.

Well, okay, not really. XD Really liked this, and I'm off to read the sequel! ^_^

I really enjoyed this. I would love to read it if you ever decided to continue it. If you already have some plot in mind, might as well put it to use, right? But if you don't then don't try and force it to come - the story won't flow as well if you did.

White's not as strong as he thinks he is.


Instead of saying fake name (which sounded awkward), you could have said pseudonym. When you said 'they' went by the fake name, did you mean the gender-hidden master.

I liked it. Everyone should get pawned at least once.

good fic. I like the ending a lot. xp. good job

so adorably cute, leave it for the mind to wander what happens. nice ending chika.

Love it! Only thing that bothers me is they are named after 'colours' but ... black, white, and grey are shades!! D:

haha great fic, wish wish hope wish you will continue with another sequel, or more chapters, they seem like great characters.
That would be awesome opossum!! :)


ALSO GRR Y WOULD U WRITE ABOUT GUYS THATS JUST SICK LIKE, GAY PPL? EW. Y WOOD HIS BUTT HURT THE NEXT MORNING? THATS SO WeIrD. /HATE HATE HATE BLAH BLAH BLAH ETC ETC
I'MA FLAMER LAUGH AT ME PLZ. I HAS NO GUD GRAMMAR.

(XD flamers make me laugh because flamer= extremely gay person, no? they're just in denial)
(and no, that wasn't me being serious at all. i love gay people to DEATH.)