This gave me chills. You should definitely continue. It's really good and I think that it's an amazing idea. I really want to get who the boy is. (I sort of hope that he isn't dead).
What really scares me about this story is that my name is Sophie and my older brother is called Tom. *hides in wardrobe*

I really like your writing style and hope to see this updated. I think it'd be a shame if it was one of those stories that never got updated, however if you decided to turn this in to a oneshot it'd be understandable. Even though I'm itching to know more.

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wow, this was a great piece, seriously. I was hooked from the first line to the last. I love ghost stories, and this one has that haunting, freak out quality to it.

awesome work.