|Reviews for Take Your Suicide Pills|
| 123MintLemonde 10/17/12 . chapter 1
This is probably the greatest story I have ever read on this website. It is mind-blowingly emotional, and meaningful, and somewhat depressing, and.. just... wow.
| a-random-writer 1/14/11 . chapter 1
Very interesting concept. Your way of describing everything drew me in. Definitely going into my favs(:
-random, from the roadhouse
| Inkspilled 12/29/09 . chapter 1
Wow, this was intense, strong and vivid. It had a lot of meaning and a very interesting concept. Everything described, I could see in a very cinematic style. I like it, good job.
| Mr.Frownz 12/18/09 . chapter 1
This story has a dark, gloomy overtone that makes you want to keep reading. I loved it
| vitriolicvermilion 9/6/09 . chapter 1
Wow. A disturbing insight into the human condition.
Both well-thought and thought-provoking, this is quite a gem.
Found it on the Hype board, and I am glad I did.
| Xx-Angel-of-Shadows-xX 7/16/09 . chapter 1
But I commend you for writing it, it's beautifully written.
Only problem is, you confuse your tenses quite a lot.
e.g. "I wake up" followed by "I watched." -f "I feel" -"I sunk"
Apart from that, well done!
| ArekuKawaii 6/12/09 . chapter 1
The beginning confused me a little, but once I got into it I started to like it.
The ending was intense with all the vivid imagery of the death. I could truely see the scene you were presenting.
The ending however, if the character was taking more pills would they not forget why they are taking them again? Just a thought.
Otherwise, good job.
| CassieThomas 10/23/08 . chapter 1
This was very well done. Scary and depressing but beautifully written. It's the good kind of confusing, too.
| Alleks 10/19/08 . chapter 1
Holy cannoli. I greatly enjoyed this. You word things in a way that sucks the reader into relating and realizing what the narrator is going through without ever having been through it. And your use of dramatic irony was well placed.
A few edits needed here and there, but not much. Such as: "brushing my teeth for washing my face". Also, when the narrator says "I Smell static.", is this an example of the groggy brain confusing the senses from ill-use, or is it just a mistake? I think it would've been clearer that it was intentional if you added another after that.
But all around, very powerful.
| Caecilia 10/18/08 . chapter 1
[to, three round pills on a Petri dish] you could put a semicolon there, instead of a comma. Unless you don't like semicolons...
Wow. This is amazing writing. Seriously. Very powerful, I like the lack of dialogue.
Gorgeous, absolutely spectacular.
Cae, the Roadhouse
| Maplewing 10/14/08 . chapter 1
Dang, that was awesome! xD
I like the lack of dialogue- it's a nice change. Besides, the description definetly makes up for it. I could picture things nicely. My only criticism is that you switched tenses in the third section. But that is all.
I never thought of water that way, either. Great story! :D
| Ella Way 10/13/08 . chapter 1
That was AMAZING!
I'm honestly speechless.
| Zodian 10/13/08 . chapter 1
I really liked this story. At the end of the story though I was wondering whether or not it was better for the main character to be taking the meds. I guess you were using the pills to represent the things we use in modern society to distract us from the negative realities/excesses of our society.
I loved this. Keep up the amazing work!
| FuckMeAlice 10/13/08 . chapter 1
Wow. That was a really powerul piece of work. I congratualte thee. The narrator was strangely compelling though he/she didn't have any emotion or personal characterizations apart from the pills. Cool.
-Stardust from the Roadhouse.