I've been waiting for quite awhile for this story to really get moving. The half of the story you deleted kinda felt like a mediocre fantasy story; not bad, but not really good either. I remember reading the old version of this chapter and thinking how epic it would be for Nocte to become really evil, but I have to admit I was a bit disappointed with the later chapters, so I'm not really all that surprised you decided to do away with that half of your book.

Now this new direction has got me all pumped again and I have to admit your implication of Nocte's gradual descent into evilness is just as exciting as the epiphany she had in the old version. I'm so psyched for this story again! Good luck with the writing. I hope that you become more satisfied with your work this time around than last you tried. I'm rootin for ya! =D

I absolutely love Nocte. She's such an interesting and unique character. I saw no problem with the original chapters you had here, in fact I liked Nocte's behaviour: hard and cynical. However, you are the author, and if you felt that a rewrite is in order, who am I to say otherwise.
It was another great chapter as usual, and now I order you to go write more so I read them.

I have to say, I do like the way you've changed this. It's not a very sudden thing, which made the last time awkward, to say the least. Now all I complain about is the lack of chapters.

haha, I thought she was going to say something meaningful at the end. "Where are my goddamned keys?" xD that cracked me up

I think this is my favourite chapter of this story so far. I enjoyed reading how she realizes what's going on with the Earthlings and what's going on with her.

Wow! I love, love, love the new ending. Nocte's thought process, the quotes woven in from previous stories--and the last line. That last line is just so Nocte. :)

Thanks for the amazing new ending!

Ashe

A very nice re-write. I'm glad you're doing it, because Nocte did feel a bit out of character before. But I did not feel that she was evil... no, not evil, at all. She just seemed like a morose and cynical mean person. I would have liked it better if she was evil like Pain, maybe. But she wasn't... and I hope you're not going not make it permanent. Before it also didn't make sense that no one back home worried that she was gone too long. Or did they not notice or care? Or did we just not know that side of the story yet? Anyway, I look forward to more updates.

Wow. Just - well. This has been an amazing fic, and I honestly think you should consider publishing, at least this story as a stand-alone. Even though I haven't read your previous stories, I totally understood this fic. The mystery and the tension were just outstanding. really looking forward to your next update.
I love how you've connected the stuff in this chapter with the prologue, though I thought the line was 'better than U2', not Coldplay. But anyway.
I think my favourite chapter was the one with the one where she realises how much her father had relieved her of her duty. That was truly touching.
Keep on writing! This is extremely insightful.

Hi!
I know that I have already told you how much I love this series, but I'm a bit confused right now.
Do I need to read from the prologue and then the rest of the chapters after that? Have you edited it already? Or is this chapter (Chapter seven) the only one thats been edited?
Thanks

You dont need to re-write the other chapters, there good the way they are...Nocte is crossing over to the dark side so of cause she'll change a little. In my opinion she's totally awsome...cant wait for her to give Nahele an **-wooping!!XD

by the way this short chapter is totally killing me

good luck on the award! ^-^(

I love what you have done so far! I don't think you should go back and rewrite the book from chapter 7 it would just confuse me, and others.
Even if you have a writers block, I love everything you have written!! Please write more soon :)

arg!
the forest?! what forest?! do they live near a forest? or is there a portal of sorts that Nahele used to go to the "forest", which Nocte opened and followed through?
that is definitely a little confusing...
but i can't wait for more!

can't wait till the next chapter!

um...when Nahele said "Tarik is a foolish warlock", does he mean that Tarik really is a warlock (as in, the insult, warlock) or is Nahele not from the Earth? Or, is it just a typo? Confused...

how could u leave me hanging?! dude that was so awesome, been waiting for this chapter to come out for a long time. hope the next one comes out soon.

raped by a female bunni =)