|Reviews for sane|
| simpleplan13 10/18/08 . chapter 1
I like the whole idea behind this piece, of hiding behind a metaphor, it's really unique and interesting. I also like how you make it so nature. Though it did confuse me how you went from storm to sun to storm again. I did like the last line though, it's a really great image.
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| Manuel Fajar 10/16/08 . chapter 1
It’s but the smallest slice of a short life
Heart’s little bit of clarity once felt
Revealing all our contradictions rife,—
As summer hail hard falling on thin pelt.
It’s but the greatest irony of God
Soul’s large amount of love surrounding all
While we towards death with frail steps onwards plod,—
Seeking redemption after Eden’s fall.
| WonderWing 10/14/08 . chapter 1
A very hard thing to describe, but you did it well. The last two lines of the first stanza were excellent.
Really brief, but really precise. Good job.