 mousegirl05 2009-08-06 . chapter 1So I read this a little while ago, and like a douche, I didn't leave a comment. I thought I should do so now. ^_^ I only have nice things to say about this one: touching, sweet, sad, believable, ironic, enjoyable. Their relationship was nice, trajic.
One quick question, a couple of times now, I've encountered you using the word 'aghast'. Are you using the correct word? Forgive me if I'm being rude, I certainly don't mean to be so. You see, I *think* you're going for an idea that would be better described by words like 'tragic' or 'melancholy' (as the English 'aghast' is a synonym for words like 'horrified' and 'shocked' and 'startled'). Please forgive me for being so presumptious to point this out. *nervous smile* Remember I really like your work! |
 diluain 2009-04-03 . chapter 1Oh, such sad irony. It's like a French movie.
You wrote Ren's struggle to get to Matt really well. Even with the flashbacks, you kept his sense of urgency and desperation and I was right there with him, running up the steps. |